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I Grant I Never Saw A God(dess) Go 
8th-Feb-2009 09:59 pm
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Title: I Grant I Never Saw A God(dess) Go
Word count: ~100
Characters/pairings: Harry/Draco
Rating PG
Summary: A sonnet for the real Harry Potter.
Warnings: D/s suggestion
Disclaimer: The boys belong to JKR, even though I’m often much nicer to them than she is.
Author’s Notes: Written for poetic_hp’s current prompt, love. Naturally I wrote a sonnet for the prompt, even if the iambic pentameter fell at the final couplet. My thanks and apologies to William Shakespeare and his Sonnet CXXX


My master’s eyes are nothing like bright jade;
They’re soft, lush moss, not cold and precious stone.
He’s not sweet, despite the dreams of sweet maids;
He sees my bruises – gives a lusty moan.
My master is no paragon of grace,
Horizontal dancing’s his only style;
But I prefer to kiss his shining face,
Not waltz all night in boring single file.
His hair’s not softly tousled, just a mess:
So he lets me play with it when I choose.
He’s no knight to my damsel in distress;
He’s got a nasty streak, and hates to lose.
And yet I love him more than any damsel can;
I love him as a hero, but better as a man.


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Comments 
8th-Feb-2009 10:50 pm (UTC)
XD LOL. Appropriate ICON!? But it's awesome poetry.

IAMBIC PENTAMETERRRr. xD very very nice, but, D: AW draco.
10th-Feb-2009 02:26 am (UTC)
Thank you! *hugs 'bad poetry' icon* And hey, no need for sadface! Draco is in looove.
10th-Feb-2009 02:50 am (UTC)
XD BUT IT'S DARK!HARRRRRY. And you never said Harry loved Draco. >( *puts on sadface*
10th-Feb-2009 03:12 am (UTC)
Harry does love Draco! And he's not dark! (Heh, you should see the fic I'm working on right now. THAT'S dark!Harry.) He's just a bit kinky.

*sighs* Shall I write a sonnet from Harry's POV to make it better? That big-eyed icon is making me feel guilty!
10th-Feb-2009 05:06 am (UTC)
XD It SOUNDS dark and more than just kinky. D: AND NUUUU NOT MOAR DARK!HARRRRRY.

<3 Yes please. :3
10th-Feb-2009 05:19 am (UTC)
Lol, fair enough. I always say reader > author, so perhaps this Harry is indeed dark.

The sonnet is so far... er... not exactly fluffy. But I will MAKE IT SO!
10th-Feb-2009 05:28 am (UTC)
Also - I wrote a sonnet in my seminar today about horrible gory murder. No exaggeration. So it could be worse. ;P
9th-Feb-2009 08:20 am (UTC)
This was wonderul :)
10th-Feb-2009 02:24 am (UTC)
Thank you very much. :D
15th-Feb-2009 05:57 am (UTC)
I like this a lot. It's charming and humorous.
I fail at writing poetry, especially anything other than free-verse, so I applaud you.
15th-Feb-2009 08:13 am (UTC)
Thanks so much, Kuri!

I fail at writing poetry, especially anything other than free-verse

I'm sure that's not true! And tbh, I fail massively at free-verse. Sonnets, haiku, limericks I can do - but my free-verse is just fail.
19th-Feb-2009 10:43 pm (UTC)
A kinky-themed sonnet, wow! Well done. And I don't think it was dark at all - So he lets me play with it when I choose. That, right there :)
22nd-May-2009 04:27 am (UTC)
Thank you! For some reason I missed this comment, but it's lovely! And I totally agree: kinky but cute.
23rd-Dec-2009 02:03 pm (UTC)
I love this so much and am not entirely sure how I missed commenting on it. A frame in a poem can give you such wings, and I think it has done that for you here. While there are turns of wit and a bit of smut (of course) there is also something more to this poem than just the surface. I can hear Draco's tenderness for Harry and his messy hair. Well done :)
26th-Dec-2009 06:01 am (UTC)
Comments on older stuff are like MY FAVOURITE EVER. :DD

I always need a frame in my poetry - my freeverse is faily. Thank you for the comment, it's lovely. :D I'm so pleased the 'love' prompt for the poem came through for you.
18th-Sep-2015 01:00 am (UTC)
I could never ever do something in verses, it's really hard and you did it wonderfully.

I love the tenderness and kinkyness of this one. Aaaawww and also Oooohh! *w*

But mostly of all, let me tell you about my feelings

I love him as a hero, but better as a man.


TRUE LOVE.
18th-Sep-2015 05:59 pm (UTC)
Aw, thanks! Sonnets are so fun to write (although ugh, the iambic pentameter goes all weird on the third line).

I love kinky established relationships, all tender-like :D

THE TRUEST.
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